Hey guys

Look I feel as If I should of won against Dick Powers. So do I deserve to be here in XWF?

I'm a lying asshole who says in public threads that he donated to the fed when he didn't

I'm a whiny bitch who sends shitty PMs to my opponent after he beats me fairly

I'm also pretty sure I might be , except I still don't know what means

Be my friend

Yeah you deserve to be here...you've won at least a match before.

Just try harder next time. Big thing I'd say to you is this, I can't hardly read your RPs because they look like this:

fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf
fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf
fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf
fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf

make a little extra effort, use paragraphs, maybe use some simple color codes or whatever.
No snese in giving up tohugh, Dick Powers is really good. Just go read other peoples work who win a lot, maybe see if there are things you can use in your rps as far as writing styles go.

If you're going to bitch and whine about losing, then no, you don't deserve to be here. You win some, you lose some. It's just the nature of the game. You have to get used to it.

Here's your feedback: First of all, one or two hundred words, no matter who you're against, besides maybe a no show, will rarely get you a win. Secondly, you need to structure these RP's. It's a bunch of quotes all running together. Look at your opponent, well written, well structured, easy on the eyes, easy to read. That's a huge contrast to what you put out this week.

Strive for quality. I don't know if you wrote your work on a cell phone or what, but it looks all smashed together. No structure. No style. Basic spoken word promo with little substance and hardly any weight.

Anyone that knows me, knows that I don't really pull any punches when it comes to people openly complaining about losing. How you think you won this week is beyond me. You have a ton of room for improvement. I'd suggest rather than focusing on losing a match, you figure out a way to get in the game we play and improve yourself.

Your grammar is way off for one. That might be the best place to start. For instance:

Quote:Thunderbolt X turns off the camera And walks.away

What is that? Why is the A capitalized and why is there a period thrown in the middle of the sentence?

We don't grade harshly on grammar but come on.

(04-14-2015, 03:48 AM)Muddy Waters Said: Yeah you deserve to be here...you've won at least a match before.

Just try harder next time. Big thing I'd say to you is this, I can't hardly read your RPs because they look like this:

fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf
fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf
fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf
fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf

make a little extra effort, use paragraphs, maybe use some simple color codes or whatever.
No snese in giving up tohugh, Dick Powers is really good. Just go read other peoples work who win a lot, maybe see if there are things you can use in your rps as far as writing styles go.

The fuck happened here?

(04-14-2015, 09:17 AM)LoverboyVinnieLane Said:

(04-14-2015, 03:48 AM)Muddy Waters Said: Yeah you deserve to be here...you've won at least a match before.

Just try harder next time. Big thing I'd say to you is this, I can't hardly read your RPs because they look like this:

fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdffdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf
fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf
fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf
fdkalf;a adfg adfglk l;fdak dfag kfadl;gka ;dfkg afk l;fkag;k gfd;klg ;fdkag;akdf

make a little extra effort, use paragraphs, maybe use some simple color codes or whatever.
No snese in giving up tohugh, Dick Powers is really good. Just go read other peoples work who win a lot, maybe see if there are things you can use in your rps as far as writing styles go.

The fuck happened here?

Hilarity, that's what happened.

Ok guys. Thanks for the advice guys. I know what to do against Flynn. Oh and Paul, I wasn't bitching about the match, I just said I felt like I should have won. The only reason I made this thread is because I have had 3 straight losses and I didnt know if I should be here.

I'm a lying asshole who says in public threads that he donated to the fed when he didn't

I'm a whiny bitch who sends shitty PMs to my opponent after he beats me fairly

I'm also pretty sure I might be , except I still don't know what means

Be my friend

Look at my track record in XWF Thunderbolt, I lost some more matches you can ever dream about. But, I do not complain about it and continue to push and push.

Also, use a computer and make a Word Document for your RPs, and ignore the streak.

Dude you think you've got it bad by losing 3 straight matches, try losing 9 in a row. That was me last year. Instead of bitching about things, I kept on working and working on things. My role playing has improved. I am even in Title matches that I never thought I'd be in.

So learn from your losses and improve, eventually you'll get a win.

I'm currently on a 5 match losing streak, do you think that gets to me. No it doesn't. I'll get a win sometime soon.

Listen to what people are saying and work within those perimeters.