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Feedback wanted! Feedback on the Baby-Person Wars
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The Engineer Offline
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06-13-2017, 07:35 PM

Alright, I'll bite. But understand this is the first promo of yours I've ever read so bear that context in mind if I seem to just "not get" something.

First of all, the "backstory" segment was...interesting. I like it better if it's about taking the piss out of people doing convoluted backstories but I'm honesty not sure if you were being straight or ironic. It's definitely creative, but aside from being whacky I'm not sure what purpose it serves in the grand scheme of building your character.

Which slides into my next point. You seem to have powers...? Thats a tough area because it logically leads to the conclusion that you should not lose matches. Unless that was just one of your other persona's. Bear with me, its getting late and I'm exhausted.

As for the trash talk, it was pretty serviceable. Although, I'm really over using edgy insults just for the hell of it. It loses it's impact after a while.

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re:Feedback on the Baby-Person Wars - by The Engineer - 06-13-2017, 07:35 PM
Feedback on the Baby-Person Wars - by Theo Pryce - 06-14-2017, 02:45 AM



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